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Comic 33 - Potion of Galus Galus

8th Mar 2016, 3:21 PM
Potion of Galus Galus
Average Rating: 4.25 (4 votes)
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Author Notes:

Aldebaran 8th Mar 2016, 3:21 PM edit delete
Aldebaran
Enjoy the new comic!
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Comments:

ChilPhil 8th Mar 2016, 5:40 PM edit delete reply
ChilPhil
That is one brave chicken.
Miaubol 8th Mar 2016, 6:29 PM edit delete reply
Miaubol
LOL!!!

yes, we never know for sure with those potions xD

But well, looks like he did get healed.. ;)
Shoe 8th Mar 2016, 10:47 PM edit delete reply
Shoe
Ok, feedback time.
First, panel four doesn't really have a point, I mean remove the panel and show it to someone and they still get the joke.
Not that it's particularly a problem but you could have saved time drawing it.
Second I do think you should have put the thought balloon from panel two in panel three since it takes kind of a long time from the joke setup (wizard is clueless) to the joke itself.
As structure this comic goes
Panel 1: Setup
Panel 2: Joke first part
Panel 3: Setup again
Panel 4: Setup?
Panel 5: Joke
You could go Setup, Setup, Joke, Joke (just four panels since the second panel doesn't do much without the dialogue(or you could keep it since the wizard's face is a bit funny in its own right))
Finally, the lettering is a bit weird in the last panel. You have the first bubble which has a translation on the bottom (which people will read second since they don't understand chicken) then they will read the second bubble. If you were to draw a line how the eyes go it would have a weird back and forth movement. (personally I would have moved what the wizard says above what the chicken says)

Good work anyway, I look further to examining your work.

Well then one quick question, is there any way to turn on notifications for replies? I can't seem to find the button anywhere
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